This is one of the things I've found the hardest to avoid. To quote one of my teachers: 'It is not simply the reading, or the taking part, or the enjoyment of such things; but what you have learned and how your thinking has developed in response'.
When talking about books you've read, make sure you're not just stating the obvious: 'It was good. I enjoyed it'. Try to make nuanced and intelligent points that link up with your reasons for studying that subject.
It's definitely easier said than done, especially in a succinct way.
2. Don't tack on extracurricular activities
While these are great at making us a well-rounded person, they can seem a bit “stuck on” to the end if not properly thought through.
Instead of having a separate paragraph for extracurricular activities that have no relevance to anything you’ve said up to that point, link these to why you want to apply (or how they've made you a stronger applicant).
Having applied to Oxbridge, this is really important as their focus is more on your chosen subject than extracurricular activities.
3. Avoid over-using 'I'
This is a tricky balance to get right: talking about yourself without sounding 'up yourself', as one tutor put it.
Read through your personal statement and highlight all the times that you’ve used 'I'. Then, try to rephrase any such instances which aren’t necessary, to make your personal statement sound a little more polished and a little less egocentric.
4. Write in your voice
The language that you use in your personal statement should sound like you. That means no clichés, no quotes, and no language that you wouldn't normally use. That said, there are some exceptions.
I generally avoid using worn-out phrases that sound unoriginal (or even cringeworthy). With quotes, there's a bit more leniency. Don't use a really obvious or famous quote - as Einstein once said: 'Imagination is more important than knowledge'. Admissions officers want to hear what you think about your subject, not someone else. Choose quotes which are personal to you.
And make sure your statement doesn't sound like you've swallowed a thesaurus. Avoid words that you don't understand or would never use normally as admissions officers can see right through them.
5. Be personal
Lastly, no matter how much help you receive from teachers, parents or careers advisers, don't hand in a statement that sounds like it was written by them and not you.
I'll admit, I've found it hard to follow this tip. If a teacher critiques a sentence, my first urge is to get rid of it. But if I think that what I’m saying is crucial to my reasons for applying, or key to showing who I am as a person, then I'll do my best to leave it in.
Your statement is something that needs working at, and it's likely to change quite considerably with each draft. But once it's done (and done properly), it will be a huge weight off of your shoulders. Then you can just sit back and watch the offers roll in.
Good luck! I'm off to write draft number 23…
Ruby is a current Year 13 student, studying English literature, French, early-modern history and theatre studies. Ruby is interested in becoming a journalist when she's older. In her free time, she likes to sing, dance, act and read.
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